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Monday, May 2, 2011
Period 4 Group 2: Jimmy, Albert, Yuru Final Draft
Period 5 Group E Draft 4
Tracy's Final Draft... A little late due to technological issues.
There once was a planet named Earth,
quite beautiful, always, since birth.
Then came acid rain,
now it’s viewed with disdain;
These toxins have ruined its worth.
This phenomenon’s not very basic;
when anions, often sulfuric,
wash away calcium,
also magnesium,
buffer’s gone—soil’s acidic!
SO2 formed by the burning of coal,
and nitrogen oxides—they both play a role.
To form acid rain
which brought on such pain,
ecologically they take their toll.
Human lungs breathe in SO2,
and also absorb NO2.
Bronchitis appears,
and asthma, we fear,
is caused by the acid rain too.
Fixing means buffers are replaced;
but continuing at this pace,
we will never be done,
the solution will be none,
because the money is being erased.
Acids kill all biodiversity,
as it was proven in the university.
Animals lose sons and
fishes are poisoned,
by smog and exhaust from the city.
Lower PH than fish could take,
it left us with an empty lake.
Less crustaceans and fish,
fewer plants than we wish,
acid rain, oh our hearts you did break.
Humans put sulfur in the air;
Much more than ought to be there.
Moisture + SO3
yields acidity,
causing statues to need repair.
Acidified statues stand broken.
Their future will now go unspoken.
Is our world cursed?
Can this be reversed?
Oh what horrible monsters we’ve woken!
Tracy’s Comments:
All of you did a wonderful job of crafting the draft so I could add the finishing touches. I noticed a great creativity and originality to the limericks. The information was accurate with the readings we looked at during class. There was a fun sense of humor throughout the piece. The negative effects of acid rain were demonstrated effectively. The damage of the man-made statues and natural wildlife was represented in a clever way. Also, you guys covered the effects the pollution has on people’s ability to breathe clearly. The limericks had a defined beginning and end to the story telling. The main points I improved were some punctuation and time issues within the limericks. I changed some words to make the rhymes more smooth and made sure the right letters were capitalized. I believe we covered the information well and in a interesting way. Nice job everyone!